托福写作语料库:聪明朋友比幽默朋友更重要

2022-06-04 17:29:52

  友谊类:

  The friends that you can have fun with are more important than the friends that you can get help from? 你喜欢交可以给你带来快乐的朋友还是可以帮助你的朋友?

  主题观点:对比可以带来欢乐的朋友,我喜欢结交可以患难与共的朋友。

  布局图:

  首段:背景介绍 + 争议焦点+作家立场

  二段:第一个论据的展开:细节支持 + 数据的支持

  三段:第二个论据的展开:讲故事(我自己的故事;我同学的故事:叔叔的故事)

  四段:让步段:幽默的朋友也有利好

  尾段:再次亮明观点 + 总结理由

  薛鹏原创语料库:

  1. A close and congenial friend is what every individual aspires after. 拥有亲密无间的和志同道合的朋友是人人都渴望的。

  点评:…… is what every individual aspires after …… 是人人渴望的

  点评:congenial friends = like-minded friends n志同道合的朋友

  2. A day without friendship is like a day without sunshine. 没有友谊的生活就像是没有阳光的生活。

  点评:个性开篇,谈及友谊对于生活的意义。

  3. a trustworthy friend n 值得信赖的朋友

  点评:trustworthy = reliable adj 可以信赖的

  4. Those who can go through thick and thin together with you 那些可以和你风雨同舟的人(作家文采)

  5. a shoulder to cry on n可以提供慰藉的人

  点评:该短语是口语用法,比较地道,写作中可使用一次,体现表达的丰富。

  6. a humorous friend = a friend with great sense of humor n 一个幽默的朋友

  7. enjoy wonderful time together = have fun together v一起享受欢乐时光

  8. sincere friends n真诚的朋友

  9. intimate friends n亲密的朋友

  10. bosom friends n密友;知己

  11. Prosperity helps us make friends, however,adversity helps us try them. 富贵易交友,患难见真情。(作家观点)

  点评:try sb v考验某人

  12. A friend in need is a friend in deed 患难见真情

  点评:in need adv在危难中

  点评:in deed adv 真正地

  13. The most essential standard to judge a true friend is whether he or she will provide us with timely support in time of plight. 判断好友的最重要的标准就是,是否他或她愿意在逆境中给我们提供及时的帮助(观点总结)

  14. Whenever I run into unexpected adverse circumstances, it is Sandy that provides me with emotional support and spiritual consolation. 无论何时我遇到意想不到的困境,Sandy 总是可以给我提供情感支持和精神安慰。(例证支持)

  15. I believe true friend can surpass the age limitation. I always take my father as my trustworthy friend from whom I really benefit a great deal. 我相信好友是超越年龄的限制,我一直认为爸爸是值得信赖的朋友,从他身上我获益良多。(细节展开)

  点评:重视自我情感的自由写作

  16. This debate reminds me of the experience of striving for attending my dream graduate school. After failing the exam for two times, I thought of giving up halfway, however, my father provided me with an ocean of assistance both financially and spiritually. 话题使我联想起我为考研奋斗的经历,两次尝试失败过后,我曾经想过放弃,但是,我的爸爸给我提供了经济和精神方面的巨大的支持。(细节展开)

  点评:重视自我情感的自由写作,更加容易文思泉涌,更加容易打动考官,因为我们先感动了自己。

  17. Instead of curling into a ball beneath the table, I ended up mustering up my courage, learning from my failure and marching courageously towards the next opportunity. 我没有蜷缩成球,藏在桌下, 相反,我最终鼓起勇气, 从失败中学习,为争取下次机会努力前行(作家文采)

  点评:curl into a ball beneath the table 蜷缩成球,藏在桌下(比喻用法)

  点评:end up doing sth v 最终以 …… 为结局(精彩表达)

  点评:muster up one’s courage to do sth 鼓起勇气做 …… (推荐背诵)

  点评:march courageously towards ……v 向着 …… 勇敢前行

  18. A humorous friend can never fail to help us to see the sunny side, especially when we feel frustrated and depressed. 幽默的朋友可以帮助我们看到积极的一面,尤其是当我们感到沮丧和挫败的时候。

  点评:never fail to = always adv 一直……

  点评:第一人称写法更加有说服力

  19. A humorous friend can, to large extent, help us remain cheerful in time of adversity. 富有幽默感的朋友,可以在很大程度上帮助我们在逆境中保持乐观情绪。

  点评:remain cheerful = see the sunny side = be optimistic about …… v 保持乐观

  20. Opting for friends who are willing to give unselfish help outshines choosing friends with whom we can feel the sense of humor. 选择愿意慷慨相助的朋友胜过了选择可以给让我们带来幽默的朋友.

  点评:核心观点句:主题句亮剑或者尾段总结作家立场。

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