GMAT_Argument高分范文分享(九)

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  On average, middle-aged consumers devote 39% of their retail expenditure to

  department store products and services, while for younger consumers the average is

  only 25%. Since the number of middle-aged people will increase dramatically within the

  next decade, department stores can expect retail sales to increase significantly during

  that period. Furthermore, to take advantage of the trend, these stores should begin to

  replace some of those products intended to attract the younger consumer with products

  intended to attract the middle-aged consumer.

  Sample Essay 1:

  The argument that department retail sales will increase in the next 10 years and

  thus department stores should begin to replace products to attract middle-aged

  consumers is not entirely logically convincing, since it omits certain crucial

  assumptions

  First of all, the argument ignores the absolute amount of retail expenditure of

  middle-aged and younger consumers devoted to department store products and services.

  Although younger consumers spend a smaller percentage of their retail expenditure to

  department store products than do the middle-aged consumers, they might actually

  spend more in terms of the absolute amount.

  Even if middle-aged consumers are spending more than younger ones in

  department stores, the argument ignores the possibility that the trend may change within

  the next decade. Younger consumers might prefer to shop in department stores than in

  other types of stores, and middle-aged consumers might turn to other types of stores, too.

  This will lead to a higher expenditure of younger consumers in department stores than

  that of middle-aged consumers.

  Besides, the argument never addresses the population difference between middle-

  aged consumers and younger ones. Suppose there are more younger consumers than the

  middle-aged ones now, the total population base of younger consumers will be bigger

  than that of the middle-aged ones if both of them grow at the same rate in the next

  decade. Thus there will be a bigger younger consumer base.

  Based on the reasons I listed above, the argument is not completely sound. The

  evidence in support of the conclusion does little to prove the conclusion since it does

  not address the assumptions I have already raised. Ultimately, the argument might have

  been more convincing by making it clear that the absolute population of middle-aged

  consumers are higher than that of the younger consumers and the number will continue

  to grow in the next decade, and that the middle-aged consumers will continue to spend

  more money in department stores than younger consumers do in the next decade.

  Sample Essay 2:

  The argument that retailers should replace some of the products intended to attract

  the younger consumers with products intended to attract the middle-aged consumers is

  not entirely logically convincing, since it ignores certain crucial assumptions.

  First, the argument omits the assumption that the business volumes of both the

  middle-aged consumers and the younger consumers are the same. If the business

  volume of the middle-aged consumers' 39% is smaller than that of the younger

  consumers' 25%, the retail sales will not increase during the next decade.

  Second, even if the business volumes of both the middle-aged consumers and the

  younger consumers were the same in the last decade, the increase of the middle-aged

  people in the next decade is not same as the increase of the retail expenditure, for the

  retail trade depends more on such factors as the economic circumstances, people's

  consuming desire.

  Finally, the argument never assumes the increase of the younger consumers within

  the next decade. If the younger consumer increase at the same rate and spend the same

  amount of money on the goods and services of department stores, the retailers should

  never ignore them.

  Thus the argument is not completely sound. The evidence in support of the

  conclusion that the growing number of middle-aged people within the next decade does

  little to prove the conclusion-that department stores should begin to replace some of

  their products to attract the middle-aged consumers-since it does not address the

  assumptions I have already raised. Ultimately, the argument might have been

  strengthened by making it clear that the business volumes of both types of consumers

  are the same and comparable, that the increase of a certain type of consumers are

  correlated with the increase of the retail sales, and that the growth rate of the younger

  consumers are the same as that of the middle-aged consumers.

  Sample Essay 3:

  Based on an expected increase in the number of middle-aged people during the

  next decade, the author predicts that retail sales at department stores will increase

  significantly over the next ten years. To bolster this prediction, the author cites statistics

  showing that middle-aged people devote a much higher percentage of their retail

  expenditure to department-store services and products than younger consumers do.

  Since the number of middle-aged consumers is on the rise and since they spend more

  than younger people on department-store goods and services, the author further

  recommends that department stores begin to adjust their inventories to capitalize on this

  trend. Specifically, it is recommended that department stores increase their inventory of

  products aimed at middle-aged consumers and decrease their inventory, of products

  aimed at younger consumers. This argument is problematic for two reasons.

  First, an increase in the number of middle-aged people does not necessarily

  portend an overall increase in department-store sales. It does so only on the assumption

  that other population groups will remain relatively constant. For example, if the

  expected increase in the number of middle-aged people is offset by an equally

  significant decrease in the number of younger people, there will be little or no net gain

  in sales.

  Second, in recommending that department stores replace products intended to

  attract younger consumers with products more suitable to middle-aged consumers, the

  author assumes that the number of younger consumers will not also increase. Since a

  sizable increase in the population of younger consumers could conceivably offset the

  difference in the retail expenditure patterns of younger and middle-aged consumers, it

  would be unwise to make the recommended inventory adjustment tacking evidence to

  support this assumption.

  In conclusion, this argument is unacceptable. To strengthen the argument the

  author would have to provide evidence that the population of younger consumers will

  remain relatively constant over the next decade.

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